Hi my name is Evan Moody I’m ten years old, and I’m 52” I also go to Saticoy Elementary School and I'm a fith grader. I’m a nice guy so I have some friends and their names are Darius, Tyler, Peyton, Jonathan, Colton, Dylan, and Trevor. I’m a pretty good student. I learn better when I listen and take notes. The things I do need to work on are History and social science,I think I just need to study more and concentrate when I do and not get distracted by my sister and mostly my family.My hobbies are biking, skateboarding, and playing basketball, I usually bike and skateboard at Hobart Park or just around the area. I play for YMCA, VYBA,and coastal warriors basket ball. I like basketball that's like my main hobby, I've been in that for a year or two. MY favorite color is dark blue because it reminds me of the ocean and it make me think of sea creatures, and when I go boogie boarding. It's just so peaceful listening to the waves crash along the shore.Here is my family> My mom’s name is Shay, my dad’s name is Randy, my step dad’s name is John, my mom’s name is Tiffany, brothers name is Josh and my sister's name is Taylor. I usually play with my sister or my friend Dylan when I'm at my mom's house. I like my brother Josh he is eighteen, and he goas to Ventura College. When ever Taylor is gone Josh usually spends time with me. I love my family they all ways pick me up when I'm down, and there always there for me.My personal goals are to have a good job and get a nice wife. In order to get a good job I'll have to finish college and get a good degree. But that falls under academic goals. When I’m older I want to be a cop, firefighter or plastic surgeon. Iwant a job where I get paid good money so I can have a nice house and yet keep it over mine and my family's head.
My academic goals are to get my degree and finish college. I’m going to go to Ventura College. I'm starting young to get good at basketball so I can get a scholarhship to Ventura College. As for immediate goals this year, I want to do well in school and get good grades. And I hope not to get in any trouble this year. We're going to be launching model rockets this year and I hope mine's the best. And most of all I hope to get smarter this year.And now you know a little bit about my life. Acutually, now you know so much you can stock me, hey, but don't!!!!Hey! You did it! You uploaded a picture! I am so PROUD of you!!! Can you please separate your ideas into separate paragraphs and add some more details? Let me know more about how you are going to achieve your academic goals and perhaps add some personal goals. How can you work on your history and social science? Where do you like to bike and skateboard? Your essay is looking good!--Mrs. Geib
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Hi my name is Evan Moody I’m ten years old, and I’m 52” I also go to Saticoy Elementary School and I'm a fith grader. I’m a nice guy so I have some friends and their names are Darius, Tyler, Peyton, Jonathan, Colton, Dylan, and Trevor. I’m a pretty good student. I learn better when I listen and take notes. The things I do need to work on are History and social science,I think I just need to study more and concentrate when I do and not get distracted by my sister and mostly my family.My hobbies are biking, skateboarding, and playing basketball, I usually bike and skateboard at Hobart Park or just around the area. I play for YMCA, VYBA,and coastal warriors basket ball. I like basketball that's like my main hobby, I've been in that for a year or two. MY favorite color is dark blue because it reminds me of the ocean and it make me think of sea creatures, and when I go boogie boarding. It's just so peaceful listening to the waves crash along the shore.Here is my family> My mom’s name is Shay, my dad’s name is Randy, my step dad’s name is John, my mom’s name is Tiffany, brothers name is Josh and my sister's name is Taylor. I usually play with my sister or my friend Dylan when I'm at my mom's house. I like my brother Josh he is eighteen, and he goas to Ventura College. When ever Taylor is gone Josh usually spends time with me. I love my family they all ways pick me up when I'm down, and there always there for me.My personal goals are to have a good job and get a nice wife. In order to get a good job I'll have to finish college and get a good degree. But that falls under academic goals. When I’m older I want to be a cop, firefighter or plastic surgeon. Iwant a job where I get paid good money so I can have a nice house and yet keep it over mine and my family's head.
My academic goals are to get my degree and finish college. I’m going to go to Ventura College. I'm starting young to get good at basketball so I can get a scholarhship to Ventura College. As for immediate goals this year, I want to do well in school and get good grades. And I hope not to get in any trouble this year. We're going to be launching model rockets this year and I hope mine's the best. And most of all I hope to get smarter this year.And now you know a little bit about my life. Acutually, now you know so much you can stock me, hey, but don't!!!! Hey! You did it! You uploaded a picture! I am so PROUD of you!!! Can you please separate your ideas into separate paragraphs and add some more details? Let me know more about how you are going to achieve your academic goals and perhaps add some personal goals. How can you work on your history and social science? Where do you like to bike and skateboard? Your essay is looking good!--Mrs. Geib
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I enjoyed your personal examples and how the words flowed so well in your essay. Thank you for sharing! -- Mrs. Geib